So I worked all day and entered some kind of late-stage editing madness. Here are some of the ridiculous things I have been squinting at over the past 16 hours:
1. "When I was at boarding school" -- is boarding too expository? Is "When I was at school" better? What about "When I was away at school"? Need to ask a friend who has attended some kind of Fancy School for Fancy People.
2. If I say that somebody in a gay porn video has an Eastern bloc haircut, will people get what I mean? I am experiencing that thing where a word's on the tip of your tongue, except it is a joke about that weird fucking haircut where the bangs are long and straight and it makes me think about the USSR dear sweet fuck what is that joke.
3. I am reluctant to use brand names in this play because of the subject matter. I don't want to be all NINTENDO DS, PREFERRED BRIBE OF CHILD PREDATORS! Also, then things get all dated. But using no brand names is weird. Right now I am seriously using "handheld video game thing" in stage directions.
4. Discovered today that I need at least two new scenes. What will be in them? It is a DELIGHTFUL SURPRISE, even to me.